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Echoic

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November 5, 2005
An Echoic theatre of beauty by ~fullonemptiness
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Echoic

Your core is refracted and deflected from
the straight path which
continues to lead you here.

Your transcendence,
although well documented,
lacked any sub-stantial
evidence
or clues on how to break
your punctuated fall.


R E S U R G E N C E


Fresh diffusal of cool silence
in this echoic theatre of beauty;
imitation of speech and gesture,
up
close
and personal.

You are replication,
my draft and fuzzy focus -
interpreted perfectly,
clearly defined fractal lines;
my better half
and improved reflection
lying in wait for me.
a little experimentation
© 2004 - 2024 fullonemptiness
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catching's avatar
Nice poem here, and with a very interesting structure (although there's an overtness to it, the structure, that bugs me a tad). Those first two stanzas are awfully abrupt, which works a little given the effect of the "after-"resurgence. *well-documented? *substantial? If these two hyphenation changes were purposeful, why? I have some ideas, but they're not very solid. Why "You are replication" instead of "You are a replication"? The fragmentation with the line breaks of "up / close / and personal" is jarring, in a good way. And that last line's great, I like that bit of bite. (a very belated) Congrats on DD!