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Echoic by ~fullonemptiness:iconfullonemptiness:

Categories Literature > Poetry > Old Poetry Structure > Experimental


Echoic

Your core is refracted and deflected from
the straight path which
continues to lead you here.

Your transcendence,
although well documented,
lacked any sub-stantial
evidence
or clues on how to break
your punctuated fall.


R E S U R G E N C E


Fresh diffusal of cool silence
in this echoic theatre of beauty;
imitation of speech and gesture,
up
close
and personal.

You are replication,
my draft and fuzzy focus -
interpreted perfectly,
clearly defined fractal lines;
my better half
and improved reflection
lying in wait for me.
©2004-2009 ~fullonemptiness
:iconfullonemptiness:

Author's Comments

a little experimentation

Daily Deviation

Given 2005-11-05

An Echoic theatre of beauty by ~fullonemptiness (Featured by `imperfect)

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:iconqueenhrosie:
`queenhrosie Apr 14, 2004, 12:35:36 PM
This just ROCKS.
I love the structure craziness, baby!

It reminds of some poem I read yesterday, but I can't think of what it was called...*weeps*.
Anyways,
its amazing, and it gets a cool, clean +fav.

*nods*

--
I hear
your voice
down the hall, through the window, above
all those trees, a light
it seems
& you are singing. What song
is that The words
are beautiful.

-LeRoi Jones
:iconfullonemptiness:
~fullonemptiness Apr 14, 2004, 12:39:25 PM
Thank you kindly sweet Rosie 'o someones :)

--
the walls are painted - different every second
my eyes are of chrome - it is television
can't let go of my leg - it's itching so and bleeding
layer by layer - i'm peeling away
a mirror is hanging - kinda loose on my wall
i'm passing it sideways - i'm saying 'hello'
my brother is halfways - through a book i've left him
he called me today - to see what i'd say

Katatonia - Chrome
:iconclements:
~clements Apr 14, 2004, 1:39:05 PM
Experimentation well achieved. The abstract structure lent well to the other aspects of the poem, although I never understood it.
:iconfullonemptiness:
~fullonemptiness Apr 14, 2004, 2:59:44 PM
cheers dude. much appreciated. the meaning is in there, and doesn't lie too deep, although that's personal interpretation so it won't be as easy as I say t'is! :)

--
the walls are painted - different every second
my eyes are of chrome - it is television
can't let go of my leg - it's itching so and bleeding
layer by layer - i'm peeling away
a mirror is hanging - kinda loose on my wall
i'm passing it sideways - i'm saying 'hello'
my brother is halfways - through a book i've left him
he called me today - to see what i'd say

Katatonia - Chrome
:iconravenlady:
*RavenLady Apr 14, 2004, 5:47:36 PM
I really enjoyed the last stanza on this - great "experiment", as usual ;)
:iconfullonemptiness:
~fullonemptiness Apr 14, 2004, 11:56:31 PM
thanks baybay! :)

--
the walls are painted - different every second
my eyes are of chrome - it is television
can't let go of my leg - it's itching so and bleeding
layer by layer - i'm peeling away
a mirror is hanging - kinda loose on my wall
i'm passing it sideways - i'm saying 'hello'
my brother is halfways - through a book i've left him
he called me today - to see what i'd say

Katatonia - Chrome
:iconlil2saturn:
~Lil2Saturn Apr 15, 2004, 12:02:56 AM
Bravo :clap: I :heart: how it's written. :-)

--
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:iconfullonemptiness:
~fullonemptiness Apr 15, 2004, 12:11:29 AM
thank you :)

--
the walls are painted - different every second
my eyes are of chrome - it is television
can't let go of my leg - it's itching so and bleeding
layer by layer - i'm peeling away
a mirror is hanging - kinda loose on my wall
i'm passing it sideways - i'm saying 'hello'
my brother is halfways - through a book i've left him
he called me today - to see what i'd say

Katatonia - Chrome
:iconla-madrina:
~la-madrina Apr 15, 2004, 7:36:19 AM
wow im speechless for once..
:iconfullonemptiness:
~fullonemptiness Apr 15, 2004, 7:46:35 AM
:rose:

--
the walls are painted - different every second
my eyes are of chrome - it is television
can't let go of my leg - it's itching so and bleeding
layer by layer - i'm peeling away
a mirror is hanging - kinda loose on my wall
i'm passing it sideways - i'm saying 'hello'
my brother is halfways - through a book i've left him
he called me today - to see what i'd say

Katatonia - Chrome
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